It is easy to love you
because you are light
like a ball I roll on
the floor
diagonally, back and forth
till you hit the side of the
wall with a protracted
thud.
It is easy to sink into you
because you are like dampness in
the bottom strands of my
hair
stubbornly dripping a trail
on my toes.
It is easy to want you
because we are apart
and your skin and the crumpled side of
your bed
are now tokens of unreasonable fondness
that linger like a glass of milk
on your bedside table
with its ring of mould festering,
unwashed.
It is easy to need you
because I am all awake in the dark,
counting the sounds my fingers
make,
on the side of my thigh.
* * *
Words by me.
I've set myself a small challenge for Poetry Wednesday poems: to be brave and share even those poems of mine that I find unbearably cliche, personal and honest; and to leave them unadorned - no images, no protective cover of beautiful pictures to take the edge off. I hope this isn't just pure silliness, and I hope you enjoy.
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it's wonderful. thank you.
Thank you sharing and being brave
oh wow, it's beautiful! thank you for sharing :)
thank you.
oh it's so great!
very much ;)
Lovely Hila
enjoyed,enjoyed very much !
Beautiful Hila - words and you are very fine friends indeed!
It's not silly. I wish I had the courage!
Beautiful.
It's beautiful. And I love the poetry Wednesday idea. Yeah!
this is a lovely idea hila
I really liked this poem. Especially the rhythm. Although I can`t be objective, because poetry to me is something from another planet.
Beautiful, Hila.
This is absolutely, absolutely beautiful.
i think it's really lovely, your writing. :) sometimes posts without pictures have their very own impact as well, nothing silly about it. wished i could write as well as you did though!
p/s: there's a giveaway happening over at my blog. x
you've inspired me
the poem is haunting - truly haunting.
you've somehow created a poem that echoes my heart.
very beautiful.
sending you happy spells
hope to hear from you..x
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This is wonderful. My favorite part is the last stanza. The image is so powerful to me.
every line a syntactic/verbal surprise (you are light / like the ball I roll on). lovely, lovely.
This is very beautiful and good. Xxx
ps. I am curious, have you read "Nightwoods" yet? I remember you love cold mountain?
Thank you guys, your comments are so kind. To be honest, I'm surprised at the positive response to this poem. But I am my own harshest critic.
nikaela marie: no I haven't read it yet, I should though. Yes, I loved Cold Mountain, it's very well written.
It definitely isn't silly! And who cares if it sounds cliché (my own fear when writing something I THINK is profound and original) as long as it's honest. And I love it. Such a lonely poem. I love the imagery of the glass of milk. For a visual person such as myself, it really stands out.
andrea: thanks!
The third stanza = love, I relate very strongly!
sally: I suspect a lot of people do :)
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